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I think very important wellness institution is heart. Because heart connected with all of our body. So we can't move without the heart. And their program is as pumping in my body, we can thinking or moving.

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Hello, Daisy!
Thank you for sharing your ideas with me. You did great, Daisy! ^_^
~Teacher Erin

I think very important wellness institution is heart.
>>I think, it is important for wellness institutions to have a program for heart conditions.
 Because heart connected with all of our body.
>>Because, our heart is one of the most important parts of our body.
 So we can't move without the heart.
>>CORRECT
 And their program is as pumping in my body, we can thinking or moving.
>>Their program is very important because it helps people to move and think when they have a healthy heart.
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