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How can one be well adjusted to urban life if s/he is from a rural area? 

Urban life is very convenient and active, but someone feels urban life is too complicated.
Especially, anyone who have lived in a rural area, find it difficult to be adjusted to urban life, because urban and rural area have distinct features.
In my opinion, It's better using public transportations when move to destinations in the city.
There are very well developed in public transportations, so people could go anywhere easily and rapidly by taking them.
Surely, it's confused about which transportations should I take on, but everyone is simply accesible to routes by searching internet and utilizing applications.
In urban area, there are so many facilities for entertainment, so it's difficult to choose one.
I recommend to refer blogs and reviews from website, and you will get many infromations about what you want.
I'm sure that most of the people feel complex about urban life at first, but when they are adjusted

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Hi, happy weekend, Dr. Stella!

Here on your answer, it seems like urban life is so much easier to adapt with or to adjust on for a person due to its facilities and leisure offerings. Maybe if we invert the situation, one from the urban  living in the rural area may find it challenging to adjust. Well, it may depend on the person as well.

The underscored words are the grammar suggestions here on your homework answer. Your sentences are longer and very substantial. Thank you for pressuring yourself to make these complex to compound-complex sentences. I commend you for your dedication, passion, and diligence in being better in English!

Have an enjoyable weekend! 

-T. Donna~

Urban life is very convenient and active, but someone feels urban life is too complicated.
>> Urban life is very convenient and active, but some feel urban life is too complicated.

Especially, anyone who have lived in a rural area, find it difficult to be adjusted to urban life, because urban and rural area have distinct features.
>> Especially, anyone who (has/had) lived in a rural area finds it difficult to be adjusted to urban life because urban and rural area have distinct features.

In my opinion, It's better using public transportations when move to destinations in the city.
>> In my opinion, it's better using public transportation when moving to destinations in the city.

There are very well developed in public transportations, so people could go anywhere easily and rapidly by taking them.
>>  There are very well developed public transportation so people could go anywhere easily and rapidly by taking them.

Surely, it's confused about which transportations should I take on, but everyone is simply accesible to routes by searching internet and utilizing applications.
>> Surely, it's confusing which transportation should I take but every ride is simply accessible to routes by searching the Internet and utilizing applications.

In urban area, there are so many facilities for entertainment, so it's difficult to choose one.
>> Correct!

I recommend to refer blogs and reviews from website, and you will get many infromations about what you want.
>> I recommend to refer to blogs and reviews from websites, and you will get many information about what you want.

I'm sure that most of the people feel complex about urban life at first, but when they are adjusted
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