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Is getting angry an effective way of dealing with problems?

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Getting angry can be a way to relieve stress, however, getting angry can not deal with problems because it only makes the relationship worse and even offends others emotionally. Therefore, if you want to deal with some problems, you need to cool yourself.

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Here are my corrections for you:


Getting angry can be a way to relieve stress, however, getting angry can not deal with problems because it only makes the relationship worse and even offends others emotionally. 

>> Getting angry can be a way to relieve stress, however, getting angry can not be a way to deal with problems because it only makes the relationship worse and even offends others emotionally. 

Therefore, if you want to deal with some problems, you need to cool yourself.

>> CORRECT!

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