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Title: My Most Unforgettable Childhood Memory

The unforgettable memories of childhood are divided into two types. Good memories or Bad memories.
Actually, Bad memories are memorable more than good memories.
When I was elementary school student, I met a friend who has worst personality.
I and she are close friend. but I had been attacked my mind because of her.
So so some of my childhood is worst unforgetten memory.
I don't know whether she is living well, honestly I don't want her lives are well that though.

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The unforgettable memories of childhood are divided into two types. Good memories or Bad memories.
>> The unforgettable memories of my childhood are divided into two types, the good memories and bad memories.
Actually, Bad memories are memorable more than good memories.
>> Actually, bad memories are more memorable than the good ones.
When I was elementary school student, I met a friend who has worst personality.
>> When I was an elementary school student, I met a friend who has the worst personality.
I and she are close friend. but I had been attacked my mind because of her.
>> We were close friends, but I had unpleasant thoughts because of her.
So so some of my childhood is worst unforgetten memory.
>> That's why some of my childhood memories are worst and unforgettable.
I don't know whether she is living well, honestly I don't want her lives are well that though.
>> I don't know whether she is living well, honestly I don't want her to live well.
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