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Describe your dream house in a few sentences.

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I want my house to look like the structure of the attic with a terrace. The house also must have a good security system to avoid a crime aim at women living alone. If possible, I would like to change it into Nordic style.

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Hi there, Judy!

First of all, a house should be a space for comfort and joy. It is where you will spend most of your time with. So a safe and a pretty one like the Nordic style suits you best. I hope that you will have it soon after working.

In my grammar suggestion, as underlined below, if we are mentioning common nouns in general, we need to use their plural form in our sentences. Overall, your answer was short, complete and well contemplated, excellent job!

-T. Donna~

I want my house to look like the structure of the attic with a terrace.
>> Correct!

The house also must have a good security system to avoid a crime aim at women living alone. 
>> The house also must have a good security system to avoid crimes aimed at women living alone. 

If possible, I would like to change it into Nordic style.
>> Correct!

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