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Are you influenced by what you see on TV? Or by what you read? Please explain a bit.

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I think most of people are influenced by what we see on TV or in th internet.
Even people who think that they are not influenced by these are actually influenced unconsciously.
I realized a few years ago that I shouldn't keep wasting my money on spending by waht I see on youtube.
If only I had knew the function of social media faster, I can save my money.
For example, I have watched a lot of youtube related to weight trainning or diet.
Watching this kind of youtube by algorithm attribute to buy expensive and stupid healthy food.
After this enlightment, I don't buy something related to Interent on purpose.

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Hello Amanda!
I can relate so much to this! Haha. Let's be careful not to be influenced by what we see on the internet anymore otherwise we will be tempted to buy unnecessary stuff haha. Thanks for the effort this week. Please enjoy your holiday! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think most of people are influenced by what we see on TV or in the internet.
>>I think most people are influenced by what they see on TV or on the internet.
Even people who think that they are not influenced by these are actually influenced unconsciously.
>>CORRECT!
I realized a few years ago that I shouldn't keep wasting my money on spending by what I see on YouTube.
>>CORRECT!
If only I had knew the function of social media faster, I can save my money.
>>If only I had known the function of social media faster, then I might have saved my money.
For example, I have watched a lot of YouTube related to weight trainning or diet.
>>For example, I have watched a lot of YouTube videos related to weight training or diet.
Watching this kind of YouTube by algorithm attribute to buy expensive and stupid healthy food.
>>Watching this kind of YouTube videos recommended to me through the algorithm to buy expensive and stupid healthy food.
After this enlightment, I don't buy something related to Interent on purpose.
>>After this enlightenment, I don't buy something on the internet anymore on purpose.
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