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My Best Friend

Who's your best friend?
- My best friend is Seung you ( i don't know her name's spelling)

How did you meet?
- we met 15 years old.

What are his/her characteristics that you love the most?
- She is similar to me! (like clothe style and personality)

What are his/her characteristics that you don't like the most?
- umm... That she doesn't break up with her boyfriend? because he is very unable and pathetic.

What are the activities that you enjoy doing with them?
- Usually, we talk in Cafe

Tell something about him/her using 3 to 4 short paragraphs.
- she is pretty and click with me. her major is Department of Practical Music.
but she quit university. so currently, she is not student.

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Thank you for taking the time to answer your homework today, Emma. I liked your composition today, you've expressed yourself well using complete sentences with complete thoughts. Please review my corrections carefully, and then try to take notes of the corrections which you have noticed from them. Again, thank you and have a great day ahead! :)


Who's your best friend?
- My best friend is Seung you ( i don't know her name's spelling)
>> Correct. OR My best friend's name is Seung You.

How did you meet?
- we met 15 years old.
>> We met when we were only 15 years old.

What are his/her characteristics that you love the most?
- She is similar to me! (like clothe style and personality)
>> Correct. OR She has very similar clothing style and personality as I do.

What are his/her characteristics that you don't like the most?
- umm... That she doesn't break up with her boyfriend? because he is very unable and pathetic.
>> I dislike that she doesn't have the guts to break up with her boyfriend because I think he is very careless and pathetic.

What are the activities that you enjoy doing with them?
- Usually, we talk in Cafe
>> We usually talk in a café.

Tell something about him/her using 3 to 4 short paragraphs.
- she is pretty and click with me. her major is Department of Practical Music.
but she quit university. so currently, she is not student.
>> She is pretty and our personalities click. She took up Practical Music as her major, however, she quit the university so she is currently not a student.
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