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Yes, because the truth can inspire them instantly, it can also hurt them.

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Good evening, Kane! 

I find it amazing how you can be incisive with your answer. 
I agree with your response; that is why I do my best not to mind other people's business unless they ask for my advice.

Thank you for this great submission. Perhaps you can check coordinating conjunctions. 
It will help you with your writing. See you in our next class!

~ Teacher Gela

Yes, because the truth can inspire them instantly, it can also hurt them.
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