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Really? Do you want to live in South Korea?
>> Correct.
I would have to say something hard that if you want to live in bedroom, you must have at least a billion in Seoul.
>> I would have to say that if you want to rent a room in Seoul, you must have at least a billion won.
Also, all the prices are going up, it's pretty hard to answer this question right now because of infration.
>> Also, most of the prices are increasing, it's pretty hard to answer this question right now because of inflation.
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