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Good evening.
There were bad news today.
One of our staffs have quit.
She joined our clinic a few days ago, and I think she couldn't get used to her position.
However, it is scheduled that new members will join us tomorrow.
So, it will work out.
I really hope so.
Meanwhile, I am on a diet these days.
Thus, I can't eat what I want; For example, whiskey, beer, chicken, ramen, and so on.
Of course, I have a cheating day.
Last Saturday, I ate fried foods, ddocboggi, soondae, grilled fish and wine.
I had a blast, but time flied so fast.
Sadly, I am starving now, because I just ate a tiny pieces of snacks and raw fish for my supper.
Anyway, today's homework is about factors of a handsome guy in my country.
We usually regard that a man with big eyes, small face, long height and six packs is perfect in appearance.
Won-bin, Jung woo sung are the best in appearance, I think.
And I heard that Cha Eun woo is famous for his beautiful appearance among the young people.
You can google it.
See you

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Hi, Dr. Kim!

I hope that this Tuesday will be better than yesterday there in your clinic. It is hard to stop people from leaving when they want to but we can always take care of those who want to stay. Good luck to your clinic then.

Doing a diet can be so hard at the start but as our body gets used to a pattern, it adjusts and everything becomes normal. I am sure you will be successful in your fitness journey. I wish you well.

I Googled all of these men you mentioned below and no doubt, they are extremely handsome. Some do not look natural due to their facial perfection but we cannot truly know who among the celebrities had surgery these days. Anyway, it is their job to take care of themselves and look the best.

For your homework answer, it was direct to the point, segmented into parts, and packed with meaning. Keep it up with your journal style in writing. Excellent job!

Please go over my suggestions in grammar as usual.

See you!

-T. Donna~

Good evening.
>> Correct!

There were bad news today.
>> Correct!

One of our staffs have quit.
>> Correct!
Or: One of our staff have quit.

She joined our clinic a few days ago, and I think she couldn't get used to her position.
>> Correct!

However, it is scheduled that new members will join us tomorrow.
So, it will work out.
>> Correct!

I really hope so.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I am on a diet these days.
>> Correct!

Thus, I can't eat what I want; For example, whiskey, beer, chicken, ramen, and so on.
>> Correct!
Or: Thus, I can't eat and drinkl what I want; for example, whiskey, beer, chicken, ramen, and so on.

Of course, I have a cheating day.
>> Correct!

Last Saturday, I ate fried foods, ddocboggi, soondae, grilled fish and wine.
>> Correct!

I had a blast, but time flied so fast.
>> I had a blast, but time flew so fast.

Sadly, I am starving now, because I just ate a tiny pieces of snacks and raw fish for my supper.
>> Sadly, I am starving now, because I just ate tiny pieces of snacks and raw fish for my supper.

Anyway, today's homework is about factors of a handsome guy in my country.
>> Correct!

We usually regard that a man with big eyes, small face, long height and six packs is perfect in appearance.
>> Correct!

Won-bin, Jung woo sung are the best in appearance, I think.
>> Correct!

And I heard that Cha Eun woo is famous for his beautiful appearance among the young people.
>> Correct!

You can google it.
>> Correct!
Or: You can Google it.

See you
>> See you.
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