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1. I know about your dream engagement, how many people do you need it?
2. What do you think about the definition of platonic love
3. When do you want to get a marriage?
4. A couple of months ago, I don't remember what I learned from a previous teacher.
5. That's one of potential key to build a good relationship.

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Hello Elic, nice effort with this homework! It's good to make question type sentences, but next time, try making statement type sentences. Please review my corrections carefully. Try to take notes of the corrections which you have noticed from them. Again, thank you and have a great day ahead! :)

- Teacher Raven 


1. I know about your dream engagement, how many people do you need it?
>> I heard about your dream engagement, how many people do you need for it?
2. What do you think about the definition of platonic love
>> What do you think of platonic love?
3. When do you want to get a marriage?
>> When do you want to get married?
4. A couple of months ago, I don't remember what I learned from a previous teacher.
>> I don't remember what I learnt from a previous teacher a couple of months ago
5. That's one of potential key to build a good relationship.
>> That's one of the potential keys to build a good relationship.
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