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The most repulsive vice is that someone give weaker people a hard time like children or women. If we don't have a wish that can can earn a lot of money easily, we could avoid the swindler's tricks. But It is difficult for children or women to avoid the vice that someone's power makes them have damages. It is very mean.

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Hi, Rachel!
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree that to avoid vices, you have to be a strong person, not only physically but also mentally, but it is something that is not easy to do.
-T. Caitlyn
The most repulsive vice is that someone give weaker people a hard time like children or women. 
>> The most repulsive vice is one that gives weaker people, like children or women, a hard time.
If we don't have a wish that can can earn a lot of money easily, we could avoid the swindler's tricks. 
>> If we don't have the desire to earn a lot of money easily, we could avoid the swindler's tricks.
But It is difficult for children or women to avoid the vice that someone's power makes them have damages. 
>> But it is difficult for children and women to avoid vices especially when someone powerful threatens them.
It is very mean.
>> CORRECT
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