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What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting rather than buying?

작성자: 박*경
2022-10-04 2372

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When it comes to its perk is to be easy to move to another place. In South Korea, most renting a house has a contraction in 2 years so when people need to move to another city such as for getting a job or going to a university, they can search another one after the contraction. Apart from that renting a house is quite cheaper that buying a house and the banking loan system is well-organized depending on people's financial conditions.
However, there are some drawbacks. Firstly, they need to have a contraction again every 2 years and if the landlord wants to increase the rental deposits, the tenant has to follow that. Also, they cannot decorate the house depending on the tenant's taste such as pegging, remodeling and so on. Additionally, most people want to be owner of the house, that's why they buy the house despite of an expensive house here in South Korea.

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Hello, Jane! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


When it comes to its perk is to be easy to move to another place. 
>>> Renting has its perks that you can move to other places after your contract.

In South Korea, most renting a house has a contraction in 2 years so when people need to move to another city such as for getting a job or going to a university, they can search another one after the contraction.
>>> In South Korea, most rentals have two years of the contract. So, when people need to move to anothercity to get a better job or go to a university, they can easily move out after the two-year contract.

Apart from that renting a house is quite cheaper that buying a house and the banking loan system is well-organized depending on people's financial conditions.
>>> Apart from that renting is cheaper than buying a house and the banking loan system is well-organized depending on people's financial conditions.

However, there are some drawbacks.
>>> CORRECT!

Firstly, they need to have a contraction again every 2 years and if the landlord wants to increase the rental deposits, the tenant has to follow that. 
>>> First, they need to renew their two-year contract and if the landlord wants to increase the rental deposits, the tenants have to follow that. 

Also, they cannot decorate the house depending on the tenant's taste such as pegging, remodeling and so on. 
>>> Also, they cannot decorate the house depending on the tenant's taste such as pegging, remodeling, and so on. 

Additionally, most people want to be owner of the house, that's why they buy the house despite of an expensive house here in South Korea.
>>> In addition, most people want to be house owners, and that's why they buy houses despite the expensive price here in South Korea.
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