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What does it mean when you say, \"We are the architects of our own lives\"?

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That means you can do everything, once you put your mind to it.
You can challenge what you want regardless of your age, race and nation.
Before challenge, you need to plan our life closely like an architect.
A careful plan make our life more lovely and perfect like a beautifully worked architecture.

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Hi, Erin!^^ Good afternoon!

Thank you so much for this composition. I have read it well.

The future is something that we will design. While our parents, professors, and mentors can point out the right path for us to follow and offer guidance, only we have the power to choose our own success.

I will talk to you later in class. Have a good day!

__T. Mayleen :)


That means you can do everything, once you put your mind to it.
>>> That means you can do anything once you put your mind to it.
>>> OR: That implies that anything is possible if you set your mind to it.

You can challenge what you want regardless of your age, race and nation.
>>> You can achieve what you want regardless of your age, race, and nation.
>>> OR: Regardless of your age, ethnicity, or country, you can accomplish whatever you set your mind to.

Before challenge, you need to plan our life closely like an architect.
>>> Before a challenge, you need to plan your life closely like an architect.

A careful plan make our life more lovely and perfect like a beautifully worked architecture.
>>> A careful plan, like a beautifully crafted architecture, makes our lives more lovely and perfect. 
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