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Q: Many countries are facing the problem of an "aging population", meaning there will soon be more old people than young people. What problems will this cause?
A: I think aging population will cause the decrease of workers.
Workers should be strong, but if many countries are facing the problem of an aging population, then the workers can be decrease.
Also, if the aging population continues, then the total population can be decrease too.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think aging population will cause the decrease of workers.

>> I think the aging population will cause the decrease of workers.
Workers should be strong, but if many countries are facing the problem of an aging population, then the workers can be decrease.

>> Workers should be strong, but if many countries are facing the problem of an aging population, then the number of workers can decrease.
Also, if the aging population continues, then the total population can be decrease too.

>> Also, if the aging population continues, then the total population will decrease too.

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