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How long have you known your best friend and what do you like most about him or her?

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Her name is Eun-hwa Park and we have been best friend with each other since when were in college.
She has a lot of positives in many ways. Amont them, I'd like to comment just one. she is down to earth that's why she has a lot of good friends and coworkers. I really look up to her this personalility. Even if there is a hard time on her life, she never disapoint about that. For example, when she had a breast cancer a couple years age, she rather thanked to God about the situation and could be treated with trust and humility. Finally she was able to cure completely.
Her personality has been inflenced of her occupation. She is a nurse like me and working to a nursing home. Owing to her mindset, many elderly patients feel comfort.
She is an asset in my life.

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Hello Jane!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Her name is Eun-hwa Park and we have been best friend with each other since when were in college.

>> Her name is Eun-hwa Park and we have been best friends since when we were in college.


She has a lot of positives in many ways. 

>> CORRECT!

Amont them, I'd like to comment just one. she is down to earth that's why she has a lot of good friends and coworkers. 

>> Among them, I'd like to comment on just one,  she is down to earth that's why she has a lot of good friends and coworkers. 

I really look up to her this personalility. 

>> I really look up to her with that personality. 

Even if there is a hard time on her life, she never disapoint about that. 

>> Even if there is a hard time in her life, she is never disappointed about that. 

For example, when she had a breast cancer a couple years age, she rather thanked to God about the situation and could be treated with trust and humility. 

>> For example, when she had breast cancer a couple years ago, she rather thanked God about the situation and believed she could be treated with trust and humility.

Finally she was able to cure completely.

>> Finally she was healed completely.


Her personality has been inflenced of her occupation. 

>> Her personality has influenced her occupation. 

She is a nurse like me and working to a nursing home. 

>> She is a nurse like me and working in a nursing home. 

Owing to her mindset, many elderly patients feel comfort.

>> CORRECT!


She is an asset in my life.

>> CORRECT!

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