¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What is the worst disaster in your opinion? Share your answer in a few sentences.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*¿¬
2022-10-18 3121

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I realized the worst disaster to human being is the war when I heard what was happened in Ukraine. It left many casualties and collapsed buildings. Men were forced to enlist in the army, and women were raped by the enemy. It shows how creulty looks like and must not be begun.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good evening, Judy!

You are right about this man-made disaster. Raging war kills so many people from both parties. Surely, there is no winner in this case. Due to the leader's desire of stronger power, s/he places countries in peril. This is unimaginable during the 21st Century. Nevertheless, we hope that the war will end soonest.

Below are my grammar suggestions. Read each sentence carefully and spot the difference.

See you in class tomorrow!

-T. Donna~

I realized the worst disaster to human being is the war when I heard what was happened in Ukraine. 
>> I realized that the worst disaster to human beings is war when I heard what was happening in Ukraine. 

It left many casualties and collapsed buildings. 
>> Correct!

Men were forced to enlist in the army, and women were raped by the enemy. 
>> Correct!

It shows how creulty looks like and must not be begun.
>> it shows how cruelty looks like and must not continue.


¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
124943 What will you do if you knew that the bassist is dating someone? ¼Û*Áø ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2
124942 Homework Àå*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 0
124941 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1196
124940 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 933
124939 Why cash is still important ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 0
124938 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 954
124937 homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2
124936 \"No matter how small the dishonest deed is, at the end of the... ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 4
124935 Describe your best friend. ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1041
124934 Homework ¼Û*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2
124933 Exercise is important! ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1268
124932 What are the good and bad things about dating? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1077
124931 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 0
124930 homework ÀÌ*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1427
124929 ¿µÀÛ ¼÷Á¦ ÀÌ*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 0
124928 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2
124927 I think ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1437
124926 If there will be NO weekend, what do you think will happen? Àå*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 1513
124925 seem ¹Ú*±¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2
124924 16.Jan.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-17 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04