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Should people have spectacular or simple engagements? Why? Share your answer in a few sentences.

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It depends on a person¡¯s value and and the ability to afford to pay for an engagement. If a couple care about having a spectacular engagement ceremony and wiling to spend a lot of money, they will do it. If they don¡¯t, then it will be simplyfied or skipped.

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Hello there, Judy!

I agree that engagements are dependent to the values and also the financial capability of the couple. Some want it simple and some grand. What matters most is the quality of their relationship.

For the grammar part of your answer, some spelling and pluralization are my comments. Hence, great job!

See you later in class.

-T. Donna~

It depends on a person¡¯s value and and the ability to afford to pay for an engagement. 
>> Correct!
Or: It depends on a person¡¯s values and the ability to afford to pay for an engagement. 

If a couple care about having a spectacular engagement ceremony and wiling to spend a lot of money, they will do it. 
>> Correct!
Or: If a couple care about having a spectacular engagement ceremony and are wiling to spend a lot of money, they will do it. 

If they don¡¯t, then it will be simplyfied or skipped.
>> Correct!
Or: If they don¡¯t, then it will be simplified or skipped.
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