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Hello.
There are plenty of works everyday.
Actually, there was a serious problem in the clinic.
Yesterday, the head of managers told us that she will resign.
Because she is a chief of all staffs, Dr. MJ and I had a mental breakdown.
Thus, Dr. MJ tried to turn her mind back all day.
And fortunetly, it could be solved today, I mean that she canceled her resignment.
Last evening, I met my friend who is also doctor(ENT), and we drank several bottles of wine with chicken, meat and fish.
It was fun.
We met each other after about 4 years.
We, sometimes, kept in touch with the phone, though.
Thus, we didn't feel awkward at all.
You asked me about patient's complaint and solution of it.
Of course, I received a complaint ever.
It could happen if a patient have so much expectation; good result, high quality service, no waiting and so on.
In that case, first I listened to them and I promised to improve it.
And if possible, I did something good for them; for example, another laser for free.
See you

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Hi, Dr. Kim!

We had a very strong typhoon and our electric power went off for a long time, even right now. In short, I apologize for sending the evaluation just right now.

Anyway, I feel sorry for another staff leaving, especially the ones holding big positions. It is also a relief that she agreed to stay with you until she can turn over her tasks to the next staff who will take over her place. Anyway, being with your friend at least becomes a respite from your super busy and preoccupied schedule. I am sure you had so much fun. I wish you more relaxing times as this.

At work, it is inevitable to have some challenges and complaints. That is why being proactive as well as exercising maximum patience is very much needed to serve the best interest of the clients. You and Dr. MJ are doing your best to achieve the goal to impress your clients. Along with your team, you can work hand in hand to give your clients the best service they deserve.

This homework has grammar correctness and clear ideas. The underscored words, phrases, or punctuations can help your piece of writing even better. Go over them carefully. Thank you  for your great effort and diligence all the time!

See you in class soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

There are plenty of works everyday.
>> There are plenty of work everyday.

Actually, there was a serious problem in the clinic.
>> Correct!

Yesterday, the head of managers told us that she will resign.
>> Correct!

Because she is a chief of all staffs, Dr. MJ and I had a mental breakdown.
>> Because she is the chief of all staffs, Dr. MJ and I had a mental breakdown.

Thus, Dr. MJ tried to turn her mind back all day.
>> Correct!

And fortunetly, it could be solved today, I mean that she canceled her resignment.
>> And fortunately, it could be solved today, I mean that she canceled her resignation.

Last evening, I met my friend who is also doctor(ENT), and we drank several bottles of wine with chicken, meat and fish.
>> Last evening, I met my friend who is also a doctor(ENT), and we drank several bottles of wine with chicken, meat, and fish.

It was fun.
>> Correct!

We met each other after about 4 years.
>> Correct!

We, sometimes, kept in touch with the phone, though.
>> Correct!

Thus, we didn't feel awkward at all.
>> Correct!

You asked me about patient's complaint and solution of it.
>> You asked me about patient's complaint and solution of it.
Or: You asked me about patient's complaints and their solutions.

Of course, I received a complaint ever.
>> Of course, I received a complaint before.

It could happen if a patient have so much expectation; good result, high quality service, no waiting and so on.
>> It could happen if a patient has so much expectations on good results, high quality service, no waiting, and so on.

In that case, first I listened to them and I promised to improve it.
>> In that case, first,  I U to them and I promise to improve it.

And if possible, I did something good for them; for example, another laser for free.
>> And if possible, I do something good for them; for example, another laser for free.

See you
>> Correct!
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