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What challenges must society face when dealing with accidents, mishaps, and mistakes? What measures

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Society may have faced misunderstanding and distrust with one another whenever unexpected accidents as in Itaewon happen. Besides victimized people in that accident, many people in our society suffered from conflicts in the course of coping with the incidents. Some politicians tried to use the accidents to their advantage. Public opinions on them were divided by selfish politicians.

Therefore, I think we have to take three measures to deal with accidents as soon as possible. First, the media has to deliver the proven and right news to the public. No more fake news. Second, politicians have to do what they are supposed to do as leaders. They mustn't use disasters to their own or their parties' advantage. Lastly, we as Koreans have to have a heart for victims instead of blaming them recklessly. We Koreans already have experienced solving countless difficulties together helping one another overcome them. We have to remind the following; 'United we stand, Divided we fall.'

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Hello, Steve! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

Society may have faced misunderstanding and distrust with one another whenever unexpected accidents as in Itaewon happen. 
>>> CORRECT!

Besides victimized people in that accident, many people in our society suffered from conflicts in the course of coping with the incidents. 
>>> CORRECT!

Some politicians tried to use the accidents to their advantage. 
>>> CORRECT!

Public opinions on them were divided by selfish politicians.
>>> CORRECT!

Therefore, I think we have to take three measures to deal with accidents as soon as possible. 
>>> CORRECT!

First, the media has to deliver the proven and right news to the public. No more fake news. 
>>> CORRECT!

Second, politicians have to do what they are supposed to do as leaders.
>>> CORRECT!

They mustn't use disasters to their own or their parties' advantage. 
>>> They mustn't use disasters for their own or their parties' advantage.

Lastly, we as Koreans have to have a heart for victims instead of blaming them recklessly. 
>>> CORRECT!

We Koreans already have experienced solving countless difficulties together helping one another overcome them. 
>>> CORRECT!

We have to remind the following; 'United we stand, Divided we fall.'
>>> We have to remind the following; 'United we stand, Divided we fall'.
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