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What are some of the advantages of cooking your meals at home? What about the disadvantages?

The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for health.
Also, it is delicious.
The downside is that there are disadvantage that we can't cook at home.

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Hello Jessica!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

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Here are my corrections for you:


The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for health.

>> The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for the health.
Also, it is delicious.

>> CORRECT!
The downside is that there are disadvantage that we can't cook at home.

>> The downside is that we can't cook at home.

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