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Hello, T. Donna
Fortunately, I felt better than yesterday.
Maybe, I've overcome the Monday's disease, thanks to time.
There were enough clients and paperwork in the clinic.
But, there were not too much, just affordable.
A few minutes ago, Dr. Jeong proposed to eat a sumptuous dinner.
Hence, I am getting happier, as time goes by.
Actually, I have lots of works to do this month.
However, it's OK.
That's because my family trip is coming soon.
Did I tell you about our vacation?
17th November this year, it's a 10th wedding anniversary.
10 year ago, I mean when we got married, my wife told me that she wanted to go to Hawaii for our 10th wedding anniversary, and dream's come true.
My wife and kids seem to be happier lately.
I have many concerns about my clinic during the vacation, though.
Anyway, I am not a perfectionist, while Dr. MJ is a such person indeed.
At times, I want to do my work perfectly, but I am not detailed.
Thus, I can understand other's mistake so easily, I think.
See you.

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Hi there, again, Dr. Kim! Good evening.

Finally, you are feeling better. Maybe you got the Monday blues. It usually fades when we get busy once again. Sometimes all you need is a good, comforting meal after all. I hope you enjoyed the sumptuous food. 

In less than 10 days you will be in Hawaii, how cool is that! Congratulations for reaching a milestone in your marriage. I wish you and your three little ladies a fantastic time in the Unites States in a week time. You deserve a break for working so hard all these times. I cannot wait for you to speak in English to Americans! Stay confident and always speak clearly.

Being a perfectionist is a difficult person to deal with and a trait one person possesses that not everybody appreciates. However, since the word 'perfect' exists, we can always work hard and do our best to achieve it. So, thank you for your composition near perfection. I guess this is the reason why you still need a teacher to assist you in speaking and writing. One day, you will be perfect with your English skills and you can be so proud of your achievement.

Then, please go over my suggestions as I always remind you. Thank you for your precious time in composing this answer. Excellent job!

See you again in class!

-T. Donna!~

Hello, T. Donna
>> Correct!
Or: Hello, T. Donna!

Fortunately, I felt better than yesterday.
>> Correct!

Maybe, I've overcome the Monday's disease, thanks to time.
>> Correct!

There were enough clients and paperwork in the clinic.
>> Correct!

But, there were not too much, just affordable.
>> But, there were not too much, just manageable.

A few minutes ago, Dr. Jeong proposed to eat a sumptuous dinner.
>> Correct!

Hence, I am getting happier, as time goes by.
>> Correct!

Actually, I have lots of works to do this month.
>> Actually, I have lots of work to do this month.

However, it's OK.
>> Correct!

That's because my family trip is coming soon.
>> Correct!

Did I tell you about our vacation?
>> Correct!

17th November this year, it's a 10th wedding anniversary.
>> The 17th of November this year is our 10th wedding anniversary.

10 year ago, I mean when we got married, my wife told me that she wanted to go to Hawaii for our 10th wedding anniversary, and dream's come true.
>> Correct!

My wife and kids seem to be happier lately.
>> Correct!

I have many concerns about my clinic during the vacation, though.
>> Correct!

Anyway, I am not a perfectionist, while Dr. MJ is a such person indeed.
>> Anyway, I am not a perfectionist, while Dr. MJ is such person indeed.

At times, I want to do my work perfectly, but I am not detailed.
>> Correct!

Thus, I can understand other's mistake so easily, I think.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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