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Why is doing volunteer work important?

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It's because volunteering helps poverty family or people, and it is good to our emotion like happy or great. And maybe I will respect about how the poverty people survived this extreme environment and facility or we can empathize their feeling at that time.

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Hi, Daisy. :)
Thank you for writing this essay. 
Volunteering is good because it opens our eyes to the dire situation of other people which in turn helps us empathize and extend a helping hand. 
I hope this day is going great for you. ^^
See you again later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

It's because volunteering helps poverty family or people, and it is good to our emotion like happy or great. 
>> It's because volunteering helps poor families or people, and it is good for our emotions because helping others can make us feel happy or great. 
And maybe I will respect about how the poverty people survived this extreme environment and facility or we can empathize their feeling at that time.
>> In addition, maybe it helps us learn how to respect poor people and realize how they are able to survive an extreme environment or situation. Volunteering helps us empathize with how they feel at that time. 
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