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What is your opinion about the banning of standing passengers on buses? Is this a good idea? Why or

작성자: 황*하
2022-11-18 2615

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We had to implement the limited passengers in public transportation before. I think it is too late to raise the issue. Unfortunately, we had a tragedy in the middle of Seoul last month after than, people realized the importance of control by politicians and public officers. However, banning the standing passengers on buses is not related with the Itawon tragedy because people can breath and move slightly in the bus. Of course, it is dangerous to get on the bus without seats because bus drivers should meet the exact time to arive each bus stop, so many drivers drive toughly sometimes. There were a lot of accident reports which happened inside the bus due to the driver's behavior. If population in capital city decreased, it wouldn't have any problem to carry out this measure, but many people are wating a bus in early morning and everybody knows how valuable their time is, especially, in the morning. If people miss more than 2 buses, they would be mad. To implement it, we need to add m

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


We had to implement the limited passengers in public transportation before. 
>> CORRECT! 
I think it is too late to raise the issue. 
>> CORRECT! 
Unfortunately, we had a tragedy in the middle of Seoul last month after than, people realized the importance of control by politicians and public officers. 
>> Unfortunately, we had a tragedy in the middle of Seoul last month, and after that, people realized the importance of control by politicians and public officers. 
However, banning the standing passengers on buses is not related with the Itawon tragedy because people can breath and move slightly in the bus. 
>> However, banning the standing passengers on buses is not related with the Itaewon tragedy because people can breath and move slightly in the bus.
Of course, it is dangerous to get on the bus without seats because bus drivers should meet the exact time to arive each bus stop, so many drivers drive toughly sometimes. 
>> Of course, it is dangerous to get on the bus without seats because bus drivers should meet the exact time to arrive in each bus stops, so many drivers drive roughly sometimes.
There were a lot of accident reports which happened inside the bus due to the driver's behavior. 
>> CORRECT! 
If population in capital city decreased, it wouldn't have any problem to carry out this measure, but many people are wating a bus in early morning and everybody knows how valuable their time is, especially, in the morning. 
>> If population in capital city decreases, it wouldn't have any problem to carry out this measure, but many people wait for a bus early in the morning and everybody knows how valuable their time is, especially, in the morning. 
If people miss more than 2 buses, they would be mad. 
>> CORRECT! 
To implement it, we need to add m
>> To implement it, we need to add more buses to avoid these kinds of instances.

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