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Hello there, Elic. Here are my corrections for today's homework. As you may notice I placed corrections for all three, because I noticed that some words were misplaced and some thoughts were a bit unclear. Please study the sentence patterns and the use of words per sentence. You still did a good effort in this one. I noticed how you put in good effort in expressing your thoughts as well. Please continue what you are doing and your efforts in learning new information and styles of composing sentences. Thank you and have a great day!

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Ohhhhhhh, I can't believe a level of this question.
>> Oh, I can't believe the level of this question.
That's a tough thing, but I would have to say it will be different who are children.
>> That's tough, but I would have to say that it depends on who the children are.
If the person who is stubborn and a nocturnal needs to be resctricted, but not doesn't need to do it.
>> If the person is nocturnal and stubborn at the same time, he needs to be restricted to go out, but it doesn't mean that he needs to do it.
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