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Where would you like to go on vacation?

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I prefer go to the warm countries like Southeast Asia.
This year I didn't go anywhere so I want to go on vacation to abroad.
And fortunately today I was talking about the vacation with my mother.
My mother called me yesterday and she wants to go vacation with me because father and my sister are so busy.
But I have many day off days, so I can go together.
She likes warm area like me so we searched some countries.
And then My mom's close friend, husband and wife, they also go to the vacation. and they want to go together.
So we make a gathering we decided to go Da La and Nha Trang in Vietnam.
I'm looking forward to go there.
Mayby we go there around on January 24th~ after lunar new year.
Finally I can go to the vacation to aborad.

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Hello Eun Chae!
You deserve to travel abroad.  Make a schedule and do it when you are available.  ^^


~T. Maine


I prefer go to the warm countries like Southeast Asia.
>> I prefer to go to warm countries like Southeast Asian countries. 

This year I didn't go anywhere so I want to go on vacation to abroad.
>>This year, I haven't gone anywhere so I want to go on a vacation abroad.

And fortunately today I was talking about the vacation with my mother.
>> Fortunately today, I was talking about the vacation with my mother. 

My mother called me yesterday and she wants to go vacation with me because father and my sister are so busy.
>> My mother called me yesterday and she wanted to go on vacation with me because my father and my sister were busy. 

But I have many day off days, so I can go together.
>> But I have many days off, so I can go with them together. 

She likes warm area like me so we searched some countries.
>> She likes a warm area like me so we searched for some countries. 

And then My mom's close friend, husband and wife, they also go to the vacation. 
>> And then my mom's close friend's couple will also go on vacation. 

and they want to go together.
>> And they want to go together. 

So we make a gathering we decided to go Da La and Nha Trang in Vietnam.
>> So we make a gathering.  We decide to go to Da La and Nha Trang in Vietnam. 

I'm looking forward to go there.
>> I'm looking forward to going there. 

Mayby we go there around on January 24th~ after lunar new year.
>> Maybe we will go there on January 24th, after Lunar New Year.  

Finally I can go to the vacation to aborad.
>> Finally, I can go travel abroad. 

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