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Is it necessary to study about the space? Why or why not?

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I think it is necessary to study about the space. It's because if we read some books or newspapers about the space, and if we studied about the space it is very helpful for understand about it. But if we don't study about space like basic theories, we can't talk about the space and get some knowledge of the space.

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Hi, Daisy! :)
It's Monday again. ^^ How are you doing? Thank you for taking the time to answer this essay questions. I think the space is a very fascinating place. People want to study it to discover its vastness and if other beings like us also exist. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. See you in class later. ^_^
~Teacher Charry

I think it is necessary to study about the space. 
>> CORRECT!
It's because if we read some books or newspapers about the space, and if we studied about the space it is very helpful for understand about it. 
>> It's because when we read some books or newspapers about the space and study about the space, they are very helpful for us to understand it. 
But if we don't study about space like basic theories, we can't talk about the space and get some knowledge of the space.
>> CORRECT!
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