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I heard intermittent eating is one of the most effective diets from those around me. 
>>> CORRECT!

There are some people practicing intermittent eating for losing weight. 
>>> CORRECT!

However, if you succeeded to lose weight as much as you want, I don't think you need to maintain intermittent eating because eating three times a day is one of the happiness God gave to people in their dull lives. 
>>> CORRECT!

Anyway, intermittent eating will help you get in shape, and give you back a healthy body. 
>>> CORRECT!

If you have failed to go on a diet before, give it a try. It doesn't hurt to try it.
>>> CORRECT!
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