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Can you talk about one thing that scares you?

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2022-12-16 1349

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Yes, I can explain one thing that scares me.
I can kill the cockroahe and I can watch the horror movies but I really scared about syringe.
I really hate needles especially hospital's syringe.
I think I have been scared since I was very young.
When I was 8 years old, I have an vaccination shot on my arm. Ann then my sight getting white and fall down.
It is because, I was super afraid about needles and after shot, I have tention decreases and lose my power.
My first shot was worst so until now I don't like needles.
Even after I became an adult, I almost collapsed at the dentist because of shot of novocain.
So I always say that problem to nurse before shot.
I really want to treat my fear an It is problem about psychology than physical pain.
Maybe I need to go the psycology consultation.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for sharing one thing in your life that scares you, Chae. :) I used to have trypanophobia as well, which is the fear of injections, back when I was a child, so I could definitely understand where you're coming from. :< Sending virtual hugs!! ^_^
~T.Harmony <3

Yes, I can explain one thing that scares me.
>>CORRECT!
I can kill the cockroahe and I can watch the horror movies but I really scared about syringe.
>> I'm alright with killing cockroaches and watching horror movies. However, when it comes to syringes and needles, I become terrified.
I really hate needles especially hospital's syringe.
>>CORRECT!
OR>> I despise the syringes found in hospitals.
I think I have been scared since I was very young.
>>CORRECT!
OR>> Ever since I was a child, I have always been afraid of them.
When I was 8 years old, I have an vaccination shot on my arm. 
>> When I was 8 years old, my arm was vaccinated.
Ann then my sight getting white and fall down.
>> After that, my vision suddenly turned white and I fell.
It is because, I was super afraid about needles and after shot, I have tention decreases and lose my power.
>> The reason why I fell is because I was incredibly frightened with needles. After that incident, I suddenly felt weak and my tension increased.
My first shot was worst so until now I don't like needles.
>> That was the worst shot I had. Even now, I still dislike syringes and needles.
Even after I became an adult, I almost collapsed at the dentist because of shot of novocain.
>> When I became an adult, the dentist gave me a shot of Novocaine through a syringe. After it was injected, I felt as if I was going to collapse.
So I always say that problem to nurse before shot.
>> Whenever a nurse is present, I would tell them about my fear of syringes before they vaccinate me.
I really want to treat my fear an It is problem about psychology than physical pain.
>> I really want to recover from my fear, especially since it's a psychological problem rather than a physical one.
Maybe I need to go the psycology consultation.
>> Perhaps I have to consult this psychological problem to a psychiatrist.
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