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Do you think people should give money to homeless people? Why or why not?

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Yes. It's because if we don't give some moneys to homeless people, they can't eat food and wear any clothes. Some of the homeless people are family who have children, we can't ignore them. So if we some moneys to them, we can save poor people.

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Hi, Daisy! ^_^
Thank you for writing an essay for this question. I think you have a beautiful heart. The world will be a better place if there are more people like you in it. :)
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. ^^
See you later. :)
~Teacher Charry

Yes. 
>> Yes, they should. 
It's because if we don't give some moneys to homeless people, they can't eat food and wear any clothes. 
>> It's because if we don't give money to homeless people, they won't be able to eat food and wear any decent clothes. 
Some of the homeless people are family who have children, we can't ignore them. 
>> Some homeless people are parents who have children and we can't ignore them. 
So if we some moneys to them, we can save poor people.
>> So if we give some moneys to poor people, we can help save them.
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