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Animals\' rights

작성자: 김*문
2022-12-18 1380

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I think human is egocentric existence. Human dominates the world considering it is okay and reasonable. They had slaughtered even the same race through various wars. So, it was more easy to disrupt and destroy the nature and the animal. However, animal have same right as human. What's the difference between human and animal? A long time ago when there was no human, some animals had existed and advanced themselves. Human abruptly came out to society and occupied the top of the food chain. Human have much power now but, it doesn't mean they aren't or less precious. The life are all valuable. So, human shouldn't consider animal as method. We have to coexist together. Whenever we butcher animal to gain something to eat, the process should be moral and respectful. And we must not do animal testing in immoral way. Absolutely, I can't oppose to the animal testing for our life in human's side but, the procedure should be at least. Human should be thankful and respect the all life.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good afternoon, Mary!
Thank you for sharing your insights about animal rights. I agree that they have rights as humans and we should respect them too.
I think human is egocentric existence.
>> I think a human is born egocentric.
Human dominates the world considering it is okay and reasonable.
>> Correct
They had slaughtered even the same race through various wars.
>> Correct
So, it was more easy to disrupt and destroy the nature and the animal.
>> So, it was easier to disrupt and destroy nature and animals.
However, animal have same right as human.
>> However, animals have the same rights as humans.
What's the difference between human and animal?
>> What's the difference between humans and animals?
A long time ago when there was no human, some animals had existed and advanced themselves.
>> A long time ago when there was no human, some animals existed and advanced themselves.
Human abruptly came out to society and occupied the top of the food chain.
>> Humans abruptly came out to society and occupied the top of the food chain.
Human have much power now but, it doesn't mean they aren't or less precious.
>> Humans have much power now but, it doesn't mean they aren't or less precious.
The life are all valuable.
>> Life is valuable.
So, human shouldn't consider animal as method.
>> So, humans shouldn't consider animals as a method of research.
We have to coexist together.
>> Correct
Whenever we butcher animal to gain something to eat, the process should be moral and respectful.
>> Whenever we butcher an animal for food, the process should be moral and respectful.
And we must not do animal testing in immoral way.
>> Correct
Absolutely, I can't oppose to the animal testing for our life in human's side but, the procedure should be at least.
>> Absolutely, I can't oppose animal testing for our life but, the procedure should be at least done in a more humane way.
Human should be thankful and respect the all life.
>> Humans should be thankful and respect life.
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