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I went my last joyride about 3 years ago.
When I worked as an intern and a resident, I usually used off-time to supplement my short sleep.
On that day I leaved for a joyride, I felt that it's kind of waste of time to sleep in my precious off-time and I wanted to see beatiful scenery.
So, I decided to leave for driving along the beach road of east sea without plan.
I had no specific destination.
I just stopped by a restaurant and a cafe that looked like great.
It was a impulsive trip, but it was very wonderful memory to me.

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Good day once again, Dr. Stella!

Doing a joyride is possible when we have a spare time and also, most importantly, when we have a car. Sometimes, spontaneous activities can fuel our lives. So, a good drive can be so much fun. 

Thank you for sending me this homework answer. My grammar suggestions contain fiction (correct choice of words) as well as the article 'a'.  Well done!

See you again soon.

-T. Donna~

I went my last joyride about 3 years ago.
>> I went to my last joyride about 3 years ago.

When I worked as an intern and a resident, I usually used off-time to supplement my short sleep.
>> When I worked as an intern and a resident, I usually used my off-time to supplement my short sleep.

On that day I leaved for a joyride, I felt that it's kind of waste of time to sleep in my precious off-time and I wanted to see beatiful scenery.
>> On that day when I went for a joyride, I felt that it's kind of a waste of time to sleep in my precious off-time and I wanted to see beatiful scenery.

So, I decided to leave for driving along the beach road of east sea without plan.
>> So, I decided to leave for a drive along the beach road of the East Sea without a plan.

I had no specific destination.
>> Correct

I just stopped by a restaurant and a cafe that looked like great.
>> I just stopped by a restaurant and a cafe that looked great.

It was a impulsive trip, but it was very wonderful memory to me.
>> It was an impulsive trip, but it was a very wonderful memory to me.

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