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Should students get limited access to the Internet? Why or why not?

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2022-12-19 1404

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Yes. It's because if we allow the student's free access, they can get some online violence that like verbal abuse or demand unnecessary shopping. So we need to give students to limited access and they don't fall in online addiction.

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Hi, Daisy. ^^
It's Monday again. Thank you for diligently answering this essay question. 
I agree that internet access among students should be limited because over exposure to it can lead to addiction and a whole other list of problems. 
Anyhow, I hope you're staying warm and you're safe. See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

Yes. 
>> Yes, they should. 
It's because if we allow the student's free access, they can get some online violence that like verbal abuse or demand unnecessary shopping. 
>> It's because if we allow the students free access, they can pick up on online violence such as verbal abuse or demand to shop for unnecessary things
So we need to give students to limited access and they don't fall in online addiction.
>> So, we need to give students limited access to the internet so they don't fall into online addiction.
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