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I think the quote affects different in different situations. For example, even though your own country allows you to own weapons, you can't own those weapons in other countries that banned owning weapons. But when it comes to religion, I think it is ok to not follow the country's religion.

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I think the quote affects different in different situations.
>> I think the quote applies to different situations.
>> or: In my view, the quote has a different effect in different situations. 
>> or: I'd say that this quote isn't applicable to all situations. 

 For example, even though your own country allows you to own weapons, you can't own those weapons in other countries that banned owning weapons. 
>> or: For instance, although gun ownership is legal in your own country, it could be illegal in other nations that ban the ownership of firearms. 

But when it comes to religion, I think it is ok to not follow the country's religion.
>> or: However, religion is a different matter. As far as I'm concerned, this quote shouldn't be applied to religion. 

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