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Hello, T.Donna.
Can you guess where I am?
Now I am watching the performance of my daughters in some small church.
Rachel and Megan go to the English kindergarten, and there is a special performance there this evening.
Actually, I felt sorry this morning as I went to work.
That¡¯s because all my daughters were sleeping, so I couldn¡¯t see them.
After arriving in the clinic, I complained to my wife that I felt so bad because she didn¡¯t wake them up with long text.
And I was somehow depressed all day.
As usual, I was so busy in the clinic.
After my clinic closed, I asked my wife where she was, and she replied that she was watching the Kindergarten¡¯s Christmas show in the church next to the kindergarten.
Thus, I drove my car rapidly, and now I am with my family.
If I have a severe disease like a late stage cancer and I have only few times to live, I will spend all my time with my family and friends.
If possible, I will travel all over the world with my people.
See you.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

I think that your friend who has cancer affected you so much yesterday. Well, having this disease sets the clock to tick so shortly. So you are absolutely correct-spending time with the people we love is the best thing on earth. It's not money, fame, or other material things. Out time on earh is limited. We cannot rewind time. So, whatever we need to do today, we have to love every minute of it. Living our lives have become complicated over time. However, the people and things we need to be happy are our family and just some simple but memorable time with them.

Anyway, your composition was 99 percent perfect. The insertion of 'a' on your seventh sentence is the only suggestion I made. Thank you for composing your ideas and putting them into a very good piece of writing. I know that your time is so precious but you still try to submit a homework and that is excellence. I am beyond grateful.

See you! Merry Christmas to your lovely family! 

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Can you guess where I am?
>> Correct!

Now I am watching the performance of my daughters in some small church.
>> Correct!

Rachel and Megan go to the English kindergarten, and there is a special performance there this evening.
>> Correct!

Actually, I felt sorry this morning as I went to work.
>> Correct!

That¡¯s because all my daughters were sleeping, so I couldn¡¯t see them.
>> Correct!

After arriving in the clinic, I complained to my wife that I felt so bad because she didn¡¯t wake them up with long text.
>> After arriving in the clinic, I complained to my wife that I felt so bad because she didn¡¯t wake them up with a long text.

And I was somehow depressed all day.
>> Correct!

As usual, I was so busy in the clinic.
>> Correct!

After my clinic closed, I asked my wife where she was, and she replied that she was watching the Kindergarten¡¯s Christmas show in the church next to the kindergarten.
>> Correct!

Thus, I drove my car rapidly, and now I am with my family.
>> Correct!

If I have a severe disease like a late stage cancer and I have only few times to live, I will spend all my time with my family and friends.
>> Correct!

If possible, I will travel all over the world with my people.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!

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