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Hello, T. Donna.
First, I want you to know more about Dr. MJ.
Although he surprised me, he also helped me work and gave some presents like sausage, hamong, and wine from Europe.
As we worked together longer, I realized that he was not an average man, and I liked him in the most of times.
During this moring class, I received the text from him.
He sent me many photos of Hawaii.
He planned to go to Hawaii first, but he changed his mind.
Thus, I never thought that he went to Hawaii, but now, I have no idea.
At times, he does unexpected things.
However, he actually doesn't like unexpected results.
He always want everythings to be controlled.
Isn't that interesting?
Back to this topic, I really hate to be late.
I think my wife doesn't think so.
Of course, I think that she was always busy because of our daughters, so she had no choice in some situations.
But, she should've tried to hurry at least.
Meanwhile, saying something repeatedly is her pet peeve.
I am trying not to do that.
See you.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

Doctor M.J. is really an interesting person. He is like water-hot and/ or cold. I think you are complements of each other, a perfect match. You are kind and he is strict. Well, who would have thought that he will be in Hawaii too right now. What a surprise indeed! As bosses, you and him want work conditions under your control. This is natural. So, Dr. M.J. must also learn to be flexible and agile. 

All of us have our peculiar or unique traits. Just like Dr. M.J. we also have our habits or actions that the people around us get annoyed with sometimes and we might not even know it. So, we must take their suggestions seriously and also change for the better. We can do our best to be punctual in our meetings and always set a good example to our children. Moreover, we can avoid nagging since it can upset someone. The best thing to possess to avoid stress from these is patiece that is why it is a virtue.

Thank you for sending me this very early today. I saw it sent in the afternoon however, I had an event to emcee. So now that the event is over, I suggested some grammar pointers underlined below. Overall, your sentences show both complexity and simplicity in structure. In addition, the meaning is very clear and conveys your ideas well.

Have a great night! See you tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

First, I want you to know more about Dr. MJ.
>> Correct!

Although he surprised me, he also helped me work and gave some presents like sausage, hamong, and wine from Europe.
>> Correct!

As we worked together longer, I realized that he was not an average man, and I liked him in the most of times.
>>  As we worked together longer, I realized that he was not an average man, and I liked him most of the time.

During this moring class, I received the text from him.
>> Correct!

He sent me many photos of Hawaii.
>> Correct!

He planned to go to Hawaii first, but he changed his mind.
>> Correct!

Thus, I never thought that he went to Hawaii, but now, I have no idea.
>> Correct!

At times, he does unexpected things.
>> Correct!

However, he actually doesn't like unexpected results.
>> Correct!

He always want everythings to be controlled.
>> He always wants everything to be controlled.

Isn't that interesting?
>> Correct!

Back to this topic, I really hate to be late.
>> Correct!

I think my wife doesn't think so.
>> Correct!

Of course, I think that she was always busy because of our daughters, so she had no choice in some situations.
>> Correct!

But, she should've tried to hurry at least.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, saying something repeatedly is her pet peeve.
>> Correct!

I am trying not to do that.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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