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Hello, T.Donna
After our class, I checked my blood sugar.
Can you guess what?
Today's blood sugar test told me that it was normal.
I was so happy about it.
While there is a good thing, there is an also bad thing always.
My wife was sick; high fever, myalgia and general weakness.
I think that she got a flu as well, so I recommended her to see a doctor and take a rest as possible as she can whole day.
Now, except for me and Irene, all my family were infected.
Two daughters seemed to be healthy, so I think, when my wife overcome the disease, we can be free from the flu.
There is another bad news.
My friend who has a cancer got worse.
I heard she went to ER(Emergency Room) last monday because of worsening renal insufficiency.
Lately, I am trying to be used to this situation, but sometimes my mind is full of sorrow.
Back to the topic, I think it's too difficult to fix our bad habits, because we even don't know ourselves exactly or we don't think it's a big matter.
what do you think?
See you

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Hello there, Dr. Kim!

I am surprised that you had the time to write down early your composition today.  Furthermore, it is unbelievable that your blood sugar level is just fine! What a miracle! ^^ Anyway, you can eat and drink again and check... I kid.

I feel sorry for your wife being infected by the virus. It is tough to have a mother sick because the children suffers. In addition, even if she is sick, she still needs to attend to your children. She needs to recover soonest by resting. So, she needs sleep. Now, you have to wait and see if you and Rachel are immuned with this virus. Stay healthy and well rested.

Regarding the homework question, generally, most people never change. Only a very few who do succeed. This is also the reason why there is a very small percentage of geniuses and successful businessmen because they can easily adapt to change overtime. People hate to change because of comfort and laziness. Hence, only the ones who are changing all the time in a positive way can meet success and eventually more happiness.

Thank you for submitting your homework early. I suggested some subject-verb agreement grammar pointers as well as insertion of th article 'a' among others. Kindly read and analyze them closely below. 

Great job on your homework!

See you then.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna
>> Correct!

After our class, I checked my blood sugar.
>> Correct!

Can you guess what?
>> Correct!

Today's blood sugar test told me that it was normal.
>> Correct!

I was so happy about it.
>> Correct!

While there is a good thing, there is an also bad thing always.
>> While there is a good thing, there is also a bad thing always.

My wife was sick; high fever, myalgia and general weakness.
>> My wife is sick with high fever, myalgia, and general weakness.

I think that she got a flu as well, so I recommended her to see a doctor and take a rest as possible as she can whole day.
>> I think that she get a flu as well, so I recommended her to see a doctor and take a rest as soon as possible she can whole day.

Now, except for me and Irene, all my family were infected.
>> Now, except me and Irene, all my family members were infected.

Two daughters seemed to be healthy, so I think, when my wife overcome the disease, we can be free from the flu.
>> Two daughters seemed to be healthy, so I think, when my wife overcomes the disease, we can be free from the flu.

There is another bad news.
>> Correct!

My friend who has a cancer got worse.
>> Correct!

I heard she went to ER(Emergency Room) last monday because of worsening renal insufficiency.
>> Correct!

Lately, I am trying to be used to this situation, but sometimes my mind is full of sorrow.
>> Correct!

Back to the topic, I think it's too difficult to fix our bad habits, because we even don't know ourselves exactly or we don't think it's a big matter.
>> Correct!

what do you think?
>> Correct!
Or: What do you think?

See you
>> See you. (Place a period.)
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