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What are the advantages of traveling alone?

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We can¡¯t live alone because we are society animal. But, spending time alone is needed to relieve our stress. Even though we love people, we usually get stress among people. So, we also need our own time and do whatever we want. Whenever we get along with friends, we have to consider other¡¯s feeling. In this process, we can fight or emotional conflict is caused. That¡¯s the first advantage of traveling alone. Also, we can plan our future thinking alone. We have lots of worries but, there is not much time to solve problems. So, traveling alone will make us focus on ourselves and find solutions. Furthermore, we can meet new people and learn lessons. Travel gives new sight to see the world. Travel gives us new sight to see the world. These days, I am also depressed planning my future and making relationship with people. So, I also want to try traveling alone. Maybe next semester when I go to America as an exchange student will be the optimal time to judge myself objectively.

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Thank you for this Mary. Yes, studying and living in another country would be a good experience in your life.

We can¡¯t live alone because we are society animal. 
>>>  We can¡¯t live alone because we are social animals.  
But, spending time alone is needed to relieve our stress. 
>>>  correct 
Even though we love people, we usually get stress among people. 
>>>  Even though we love people, we usually get stressed around people. 
So, we also need our own time and do whatever we want. 
>>> correct 
Whenever we get along with friends, we have to consider other¡¯s feelings. 
>>> correct  
In this process, we can fight or emotional conflict is caused. 
>>> correct  
That¡¯s the first advantage of traveling alone. 
>>> correct  
Also, we can plan our future thinking alone. 
>>>  correct 
We have lots of worries but, there is not much time to solve problems. 
>>>  correct 
So, traveling alone will make us focus on ourselves and find solutions. 
>>>  correct 
Furthermore, we can meet new people and learn lessons. 
>>>  correct 
Travel gives new sight to see the world. 
>>> Traveling gives new sight to see the world.  
Travel gives us new sight to see the world. 
>>> OR: Traveling gives us new insight to see the world. 
These days, I am also depressed planning my future and making relationship with people. 
>>> correct   
So, I also want to try traveling alone. 
>>> correct  
Maybe next semester when I go to America as an exchange student will be the optimal time to judge myself objectively.
>>> correct  
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