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In my culture, people have parties as they prepare for the new year. It is usually a family celebration. We turn on the TV to hear the New Year's bell and wait for the New Year while eating delicious food. And when it's New Year's, we hug each other and say nice things to each other.

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Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

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In my culture, people have parties as they prepare for the new year. 
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It is usually a family celebration. 
>>> CORRECT!

We turn on the TV to hear the New Year's bell and wait for the New Year while eating delicious food. 
>>> CORRECT!

And when it's New Year's, we hug each other and say nice things to each other.
>>> CORRECT!
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