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Happy new year, Donna!
I hope you and your family will be healthy and full of good events will happen around you.
I've been glad to meet you in this class since last year.
I think I`m more confident to speak English than I first started this class.
I want to be a fluent English speaker studying with you.
Thank you always.

It's difficult to decide the destination in which people meet together, especially in case that people work and live in different cities.
It might be burdensom to go to the meeting place if the place is too far from their home or workplace.
So, it's important to find a proper place to which people could be accessible easily.
I think it' better to determine spots halfway.
In addition, it's perfect if the place is located near the trasportation station.

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Hi there again, Doctor Stella!

I wish you nothing but excellent health and good fortune too this year! It's my pleasure to serve you and influence you to speak appropriately all the time in English. I am sure that you will get more opportunities for this year to speak your mind and express yourself in this language.

The suggestions I made below have thingst to do with diction (choice of words) on sentences #2 and #7. Please go over thme well.

Thank you and have a blast this year!

-T. Donna~

Happy new year, Donna!
>> Correct!

I hope you and your family will be healthy and full of good events will happen around you.
>> Correct!
Or: I hope you and your family will be healthy and  good events will happen around you.

I've been glad to meet you in this class since last year.
>> Correct!

I think I`m more confident to speak English than I first started this class.
>> Correct!

I want to be a fluent English speaker studying with you.
>> Correct!

Thank you always.
>> Correct!


It's difficult to decide the destination in which people meet together, especially in case that people work and live in different cities.
>> It's difficult to decide the destination in which people meet together, especially in cases when people work and live in different cities.

It might be burdensom to go to the meeting place if the place is too far from their home or workplace.
>> Correct!

So, it's important to find a proper place to which people could be accessible easily.
>> Correct!
Or: 
So, it's important to find a proper place in which people could be accessible easily.

I think it' better to determine spots halfway.
>> Correct!

In addition, it's perfect if the place is located near the trasportation station.
>> Correct!
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