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Yes. I care for my personal hygiene a priority. Because personal hygiene is related to health. If you don't take care of personal hygiene, germs will increase and it will be bad for your health. And personal hygiene is an image. People basically hate dirty things. But if you don't care of personal hygiene, people around you'll get away with it. Therefore, personal hygiene is very important to me.

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


Yes. I care for my personal hygiene a priority. 
>>> Yes. I care for my personal hygiene as a priority. 

Because personal hygiene is related to health. 
>>> CORRECT!

If you don't take care of personal hygiene, germs will increase and it will be bad for your health. 
>>> CORRECT!

And personal hygiene is an image. 
>>> CORRECT!

People basically hate dirty things. 
>>> CORRECT!

But if you don't care of personal hygiene, people around you'll get away with it.
>>> But if you don't care about personal hygiene, people around you'll get away with it.

Therefore, personal hygiene is very important to me.
>>> CORRECT!
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