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My tutor was so kind and generous. She immediately corrected my sentences to be more natural thankfully like native speaker says. But, it was difficult to listen to her voice. It felt like she was far away from the phone. Even though I increased the volume of the phone, I had to concentrate on listening to her.

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Hi Yu La!
Thank you for the kind words.
I am already working with the company specialist to fix the sound situation.
Thank you for your composition today.
Please take note of the suggestions below.
I'll talk to you tomorrow.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My tutor was so kind and generous. 
>> Correct
She immediately corrected my sentences to be more natural thankfully like native speaker says. 
>> She immediately corrected my sentences for me to speak naturally like a native speaker. 
But, it was difficult to listen to her voice. 
>> However, it was difficult to hear her voice.
It felt like she was far away from the phone.
>> Correct
Even though I increased the volume of the phone, I had to concentrate on listening to her.
>> Even though I increased the volume on my phone, I had to concentrate on listening to her.
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