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I strongly recommend to take a nap when someone is sleepy.
After I eat lunch or when I`m so exhausted, I used to be sleepy.
At that situation, I couldn`t concentrate my works entirely.
I spend more time and don\'t progress to-do-lists efficiently .
I think it\'s better focusing on works after taking a nap.
However, it's important not to take a nap too long in the daytime, because it provokes headache and make you dull.
Also, you might be awake late in the night and miss the proper time to get sleep, so you feel tired and sleepy the next day.
It is a vicious cycle.
Twenty to thirty minutes is the best to take nap.

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Hello, Dr. Stella!

It is true that taking a nap when badly needed help someone reset the brain and makes it more alert. Even drivers are always recommended tio park the car and nap when necessary. In your case as a doctor, you need to be awake all the time when in duty. Hence, a good nap is a good friend.

For my grammar suggestions, 'work' is considered a series of tasks in one workplace. If you have other jobs in other places, that is considered another work, thus, you have two 'works'. Furtheremore, you used very good expression on your eighth sentence, well done! Overall, great job on this homework task. 

See you in a few minutes!

-T. Donna~

I strongly recommend to take a nap when someone is sleepy.
>> Correct!

After I eat lunch or when I`m so exhausted, I used to be sleepy.
>> Correct!

At that situation, I couldn`t concentrate my works entirely.
>> At that situation, I couldn't (entirely) concentrate on my work (intirely).

I spend more time and don\'t progress to-do-lists efficiently .
>> I spend more time and don't progress with my to-do-list efficiently .

I think it\'s better focusing on works after taking a nap.
>> I think it's better focusing on work after taking a nap.

However, it's important not to take a nap too long in the daytime, because it provokes headache and make you dull.
>> Correct!

Also, you might be awake late in the night and miss the proper time to get sleep, so you feel tired and sleepy the next day.
>> Correct!

It is a vicious cycle.
>> Correct! Very good expression!

Twenty to thirty minutes is the best to take nap.
>> Twenty to 30 minutes is the best to take a nap.
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