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When I look for my apartment to live in.
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When I look for my apartment to live in.
>>> When I look for an apartment to live in.
Most important thing is convenient transportation.
>>> The most important thing is considering convenient transportation.
Especially I preper my house is near the subway station.
>>> I specifically prefer my house to be near the subway station.
Because this transportation is fast to go destination.
>>> Because this transportation is fast to go to destination.
And we can figure out the arrival time there.
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