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If a certain information that you heard were true, what would you do to convince other people?

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When I am sure that my information is true, I would rather insist on mine than others at first. However, I don't persuade everybody to believe what I heard. When I try to change someone who has a piece of wrong information, I figure out how close we are first of all. Whenever I push or say to someone that his or her information or idea is wrong, we can end up fighting and then giving each other the cold shoulder. Above all, I am concerned about whether my information is true, so I hesitated to give someone my true information. I can ruin someone's life, so I would try to give advice. The result is the individual's responsibility. For example, when the stock market was booming, people collected information to invest, and we asked each other which one was the potential to be on the rise, I invested in the company which my friend surely recommended, and I failed. We cannot be sure which information is true completely.

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I couldn't agree more, Sun Jung. I hope you are able to get back on your feet and have better investment in the future.-Faith-
When I am sure that my information is true, I would rather insist on mine than others at first. 
>> CORRECT
However, I don't persuade everybody to believe what I heard. 
>> CORRECT
When I try to change someone who has a piece of wrong information, I figure out how close we are first of all. 
>> CORRECT
OR When I try to change someone's stance, I first value our closeness. 
Whenever I push or say to someone that his or her information or idea is wrong, we can end up fighting and then giving each other the cold shoulder. 
>> CORRECT
Above all, I am concerned about whether my information is true, so I hesitated to give someone my true information. 
>> Above all, I am concerned about whether my information is true, so I hesitate to give someone my true information. 
I can ruin someone's life, so I would try to give advice. 
>> I could ruin someone's life, so I would try to give advice. 
The result is the individual's responsibility. 
>> CORRECT
For example, when the stock market was booming, people collected information to invest, and we asked each other which one was the potential to be on the rise, 
>> For example, when the stock market was booming, people collected information to invest, and we asked each other which one had the potential to be on the rise.
I invested in the company which my friend surely recommended, and I failed. 
>> CORRECT
We cannot be sure which information is true completely.
>> Therefore, we cannot be sure which information is true completely.
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