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Body language is definitely IMPORTANT

작성자: 김*영
2023-01-11 958

회원님의 영작문

I think body language is important.

There are 2 reasons.

First of all, it can be helpful to express your thoughts and feelings.
When you meet a friend, you can shake your hand instead of saying “hi”.
Also, when you feel thankful or touched to someone, you can hold someone’s hands or hug them instead of saying “thank you so much”.
Like these situations, body languages can be efficient way to express your thoughts and feelings.

Second, it is a common language all of the world sometimes.
Let’s imagine your are traveling Paris but you can’t speak the French language, you are in the fancy French restaurant and the main chief asks you “how was your food?” using French.
Probably, you’re embarrassed immediately but as soon, you can use your hands to make “Thumbs up”, it means “awesome”.
Like this, even though we don’t know other language, body language help communicate foreigners.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Ellen, 
Nonverbal behavior is the most crucial element of communication. Body language assists us in understanding and decoding what a person is saying. That is the importance of body language. It also helps us to interpret others' moods and emotions. Moreover, it enhances our conscious understanding of people's reactions to what we say and how we say it. ~ Teacher QUENNY

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I think body language is important.
>> I think body language is important.(CORRECT)
There are 2 reasons.
>> These are the 2 reasons.
First of all, it can be helpful to express your thoughts and feelings.
>> First of all, it can be helpful to express your thoughts and feelings.(CORRECT) 
When you meet a friend, you can shake your hand instead of saying “hi”.
>> When you meet a friend, you can bow or shake hands instead of saying “hi”.
Also, when you feel thankful or touched to someone, you can hold someone’s hands or hug them instead of saying “thank you so much”.
>>  Also, when you feel thankful or touched by someone, you can hold someone’s hands or hug them instead of saying “thank you so much”.
Like these situations, body languages can be efficient way to express your thoughts and feelings.
>> In these situations, body language can be an efficient way to express your thoughts and feelings.

Second, it is a common language all of the world sometimes.
>> Second, it is sometimes a common language all over the world. 
Let’s imagine your are traveling Paris but you can’t speak the French language, you are in the fancy French restaurant and the main chief asks you “how was your food?” using French.
>> Let’s imagine you are traveling to Paris but you can’t speak the French language, you are in a fancy French restaurant and the main chef asks you “how was your food?” using French.
Probably, you’re embarrassed immediately but as soon, you can use your hands to make “Thumbs up”, it means “awesome”.
>> Probably, you’re immediately embarrassed but as soon as you can use your finger to make a “Thumbs up”, it means “awesome”.
Like this, even though we don’t know other language, body language help communicate foreigners.
>> Just like this situation even though we don’t know other languages, body language helps us communicate with foreigners.

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I think body language is important.

There are 2 reasons.

First of all, it can be helpful to express your thoughts and feelings.
When you meet a friend, you can shake your hand instead of saying “hi”.
Also, when you feel thankful or touched to someone, you can hold someone’s hands or hug them instead of saying “thank you so much”.
Like these situations, body languages can be efficient way to express your thoughts and feelings.

Second, it is a common language all of the world sometimes.
Let’s imagine your are traveling Paris but you can’t speak the French language, you are in the fancy French restaurant and the main chief asks you “how was your food?” using French.
Probably, you’re embarrassed immediately but as soon, you can use your hands to make “Thumbs up”, it means “awesome”.
Like this, even though we don’t know other language, body language help communicate foreigners.
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