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Greeting is the starting point of human relationships.
By giving a greeting to strangers, you can imprint your existence to other.
Greering is also a sign of respect of the other person.
Therefore, by giving just a simple greeting to other, you can give a good impression about you.
There are various types of greeting in the world but generally people use both of body language and speech
such as shaking or holding hands with say 'hi~'.
The main point in here is looking others eyes and shows soft smile.

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Hello there Kate!
I am impressed with how you wrote your homework. You have used and chosen words that were not commonly used by other students. Keep up the good work for it will drive you in reaching your goal.
Have a good afternoon!
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Greeting is the starting point of human relationships.
>>> CORRECT!
By giving a greeting to strangers, you can imprint your existence to other.
>>>  By giving a greeting to strangers, you can imprint your existence on others.
Greeting is also a sign of respect of the other person.
>>> Greeting is also a sign of respect for the other person.
Therefore, by giving just a simple greeting to other, you can give a good impression about you.
>>>Therefore, by giving just a simple greeting to others, you can give a good impression about yourself.
There are various types of greeting in the world but generally people use both of body language and speech such as shaking or holding hands with say 'hi~'.
>>> There are various types of greeting in the world but generally, people use both body language and speech such as shaking or holding hands to say 'hi~'.
The main point in here is looking others eyes and shows soft smile.
>>>  The main point here is looking into each others' eyes and showing a soft smile.
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