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Hello.
It's already past midnight.
I am now in my clinic working some paper job.
I've almost done that, however, because I will go home and take a shower, I suppose I can't go to bed soon.
As you can guess, I had a hectic day the most.
In the morning, I corrected some of my chart to pass the assessement by Health Insurance Review and Assessment Service center. (HIRA)
HIRA is a unique center that assess the doctor's treatment.
Those people who work there are not doctors, however, they have a right to judge a doctor's diagnosis and treatment.
It doesn't make sense. Don't you think so?
Anyway, I had a meeting with a signboard company at lunch time.
As soon as the meeting was over, we had another meeting with our staffs who work in the information desk.
In addition, there were too much clients today.
Also, in the evening, we visited other hospital that is in Seoul, and we met our Franchise doctor there.
It was already too late, so I don't think I can join today's class.
See you Friday.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

I fondly hope that you got the rest you needed. It was only right to hold your class today sicne you worked nonstop yesterday. 

I agree that assessments need to be done by experts and professionals who belong in the same field. If the HIRA people aren't doctors then what are they? Well, since they have assessed so many clinic's they must have the expertise to look into your application.

Soon, your signboard is going to be hang in front of your clinic and showcase your brand or excellence and quality dermatologic expertise.

Always think that a busy day is a good day. Never forget to pause and rest. I am glad you did that today.

Read the comments on grammar below and take note of the proper use of 'the' and 'a' and when not to use them.

I am grateful for this homework. Brace yourself for another busy day!

See you tomorrow then.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

It's already past midnight.
>> Correct!

I am now in my clinic working some paper job.
>> I am now in my clinic working on some paper job.

I've almost done that, however, because I will go home and take a shower, I suppose I can't go to bed soon.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

As you can guess, I had a hectic day the most.
>> Correct!
Or: As you can guess, I had the most hectic day.

In the morning, I corrected some of my chart to pass the assessement by Health Insurance Review and Assessment Service center. (HIRA)
>> In the morning, I corrected some of my chart to pass the assessement by the Health Insurance Review and Assessment Service center. (HIRA)

HIRA is a unique center that assess the doctor's treatment.
>> HIRA is a unique center that assesses the doctor's treatments.

Those people who work there are not doctors, however, they have a right to judge a doctor's diagnosis and treatment.
>> Those people who work there are not doctors, however, they have a right to judge doctors' diagnosis and treatment.

It doesn't make sense. Don't you think so?
>> Correct!

Anyway, I had a meeting with a signboard company at lunch time.
>> Anyway, I had a meeting with the signboard company at lunch time.

As soon as the meeting was over, we had another meeting with our staffs who work in the information desk.
>> Correct!
Or: staff

In addition, there were too much clients today.
>> In addition, there were too many clients today.

Also, in the evening, we visited other hospital that is in Seoul, and we met our Franchise doctor there.
>> Also, in the evening, we visited the other hospital that is in Seoul, and we met our Franchise doctor there.

It was already too late, so I don't think I can join today's class.
>> Correct!

See you Friday.
>> See you on Friday.
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