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We must continue to learn how to live. I want to improve my personality. It takes a lot of time to get skills. My English skills are getting better. In Korea, water is self-service in a regular restaurant.

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Nicely done, Jeny! Your sentences are exceptional! You have used the words effectively in each sentence. I just placed an alternative word on the 3rd item. Instead of 'get' you may use the word 'acquire', it's commonly used hand in hand with the word 'skills'. Thank you for doing your best! Keep it up, Jeny!

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We must continue to learn how to live.
>> Correct.
I want to improve my personality.
>> Correct.
It takes a lot of time to get skills.
>> Correct. OR It takes a lot of time to acquire skills.
My English skills are getting better.
>> Correct.
In Korea, water is self-service in a regular restaurant.
>> Correct.
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