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I agree that Our personalities are predetermined before we born and it's extremely hard to change it. Because it's very difficult to change the way we born. People can change their part of personalities but they can't change nature of them. The reason why it's hard to change is people usually don't recognized their problems. Even though you recognize your problem and put efforts to solve the problems, almost a lot of people give up during the progress or change personality half.

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Good day Sophia! Happy Hump Day to you! ^^ Today is our celebration of Flower Festival in my city. The city is filled with flowers! Hahaha! There are a lot of tourists though that's why it's crowded and the traffic is serious. Huhuhu! See you! 
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I agree that Our personalities are predetermined before we born and it's extremely hard to change it. 
>>> I agree that our personalities are predetermined before we are born and it's extremely hard to change them. 
Because it's very difficult to change the way we born.
>>> Because it's very difficult to change the way we are born.
 People can change their part of personalities but they can't change nature of them.
>>> People can change some parts of  theirs personalities but they can't change them naturally.
 The reason why it's hard to change is people usually don't recognized their problems. 
>>> CORRECT!
Even though you recognize your problem and put efforts to solve the problems, almost a lot of people give up during the progress or change half of their personality. 
>>> CORRECT!
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